I will beta read mystery, thriller for tension, plot holes, twists
Stylistic Line Editor and Experienced Beta Reader
Buyers keep returning
Jessica H has an exceptional number of repeat buyers
Level 2
Has met high performance criteria and has a proven track record for meeting client expectations.
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Known for exceptionally quick replies
What people loved about this freelancer
karenlclancy

United States
I booked Jess twice. The first go around she gave me such good notes on my novel that I implemented them on yet another edit. Once done I contracted her to...
nicw2019

United Kingdom
Working with Jessica has been, once again, a wonderful experience. I cannot imagine working with anyone else now when I have a manuscript that needs an in-depth...
k_alexis_adams

United States
Jess was an absolute DREAM to work with. Her inline comments and edit suggestions were both thorough and thoughtful, and her reader’s report gave me a wealth...
pemurphy0627

United States
Jess provided me with a helpful, very thorough review of my manuscript. The reader report was detailed and addressed all the questions I initially had. The...
csc555

United States
Jessica did an outstanding job reviewing my query letter and synopsis. After her initial suggestions, I had some questions, and she provided a lot of helpful...
About this Gig
Is your subtext doing the lifting or are mechanical plot points crowding out the suspense? Is the dread earned between the lines or are your reveals too overtly forecasted? Is your reader actively calculating the threat or is the mystery laid out too literally on the page? Let's ensure your micro-tension is fully calibrated and your narrative execution carries the psychological depth and visceral grip your readers crave. Whether you've written a gritty procedural, a dynamic thriller, a slow-burn psychological suspense or a literary mystery rich with subtext and metaphor, I'll offer collaborative-style feedback from a reader's and a writer's perspective, highlighting what's effective and identifying opportunities for refinement. I tailor my feedback to the specific sub-genre - clue planting for whodunits; interiority and atmospheric density for southern gothic; dialogue and voice for hard-boiled; moral ambiguity and narrative payoff for noir; emotional calibration and intrigue for domestic or romantic suspense. Actionable feedback is provided via in-line comments and a report: foreshadowing, friction, psychological and plot plausibility, narrative velocity, and reader expectations.
Genre:
Horror/ thriller
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Literary fiction
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Mystery
Language:
English
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Please inform the freelancer of any preferences or concerns regarding the use of AI tools in the completion and/or delivery of your order.
FAQ
Do you have experience critiquing writing beyond Fiverr?
Yes, as an evaluator for a popular literary journal that publishes fiction across multiple genres I analyze submissions, working directly with the editorial team. In addition, I have assisted dozens of authors by providing comprehensive, constructive manuscript critique and line editing services.
Will your feedback be like what writers receive from literary journals or editors?
My feedback and suggestions will combine an engaged reader's perspective with the insight I've gained from professionally reviewing and critiquing literary journal submissions and collaborating with various editors while readying my own and other authors' work for publication.
What is your communication style and tone when providing feedback?
I strive to provide clear, professional, constructive feedback that supports your vision as the author. I like to collaborate by sharing insights, making suggestions and offering explanations that hone your style and strengthen your storytelling so that it impacts readers the way you intend.
Does the sample line edit only apply to the first 1000 words or can I choose?
Unless otherwise requested, I’ll provide the sample line edit on the first 1000 words (roughly 4 double-spaced pages). If you’d prefer a different section, feel free to specify (example: please apply the sample line edit to Chapter Fourteen, pages 92-96, the coffee shop action scene).
What documents do you work with? How do I upload my manuscript?
I work with DOC, DOCX and Google Docs. If sending a Google Doc, please download and attach your manuscript as a DOCX and specify that you prefer working in Google Docs so that I can use the correct program while completing the sample line edit. I cannot accept links at this time.
Do you use software or AI for the line editing sample?
No, all sample line edits are made by hand in order to maintain nuance, style, subtext, emotional depth and voice. I apply industry-standard editing techniques, using the Chicago Manual of Style and other trusted references. Additionally, I do not use AI while generating beta reader reports.
Do you beta read manuscripts longer than 90K?
Yes, I regularly read full-length novels. Packages are structured for clarity, and longer manuscripts are welcome - feel free to message me if your word count is above the listed range and I'll quote you a fair, proportional rate.
What if I'm not sure which sub-genre my story falls under?
That's common - especially in early or hybrid drafts. Just let me know if you'd like help determining which way your story leans. I can comment upon tropes, genre conventions, and reader expectations: noir vs hard-boiled, cozy vs traditional whodunit, domestic suspense vs psychological thriller.
What stage of manuscript do you usually work with?
I work with manuscripts at all stages, from first drafts to polished works nearing submission or publication, providing comprehensive feedback on multiple elements while focusing on what will help your story resonate most with readers.
Do you read genres other than mystery, thriller or crime?
Yes, I have experience reading and critiquing literary fiction, fantasy, Sci-Fi, YA, horror, and romance. Just message me and I'll create a custom offer focused on your specific genre and tailor my feedback accordingly.
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Repeat Client

United States
I booked Jess twice. The first go around she gave me such good notes on my novel that I implemented them on yet another edit. Once done I contracted her to read it again. It was a great experience for me to write with the knowledge she would be checking it for flow, clarity and storytelling. I can’t wait to write another book and to work with her again!
$200-$400
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6 weeks
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nicw2019
Repeat Client

United Kingdom
Working with Jessica has been, once again, a wonderful experience. I cannot imagine working with anyone else now when I have a manuscript that needs an in-depth review. I write psychological thriller and Jessica's knowledge and grasp of what is required to deliver the reader a propulsive read is beyond...
$100-$200
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9 days
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Helpful?K k_alexis_adams

United States
Jess was an absolute DREAM to work with. Her inline comments and edit suggestions were both thorough and thoughtful, and her reader’s report gave me a wealth of ideas for improving my manuscript, which is exactly what I was hoping for! The detailed notes she provided outlining my novel’s structure and...
$100-$200
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13 days
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Helpful?P pemurphy0627

United States
Jess provided me with a helpful, very thorough review of my manuscript. The reader report was detailed and addressed all the questions I initially had. The inline comments are also greatly appreciated and useful. I feel like her comments were honest and encouraging at the same time. As I'm returning...
$100-$200
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13 days
Duration
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Helpful?C csc555
Repeat Client

United States
Jessica did an outstanding job reviewing my query letter and synopsis. After her initial suggestions, I had some questions, and she provided a lot of helpful suggestions as I worked through more edits. She was knowledgeable, professional, and very timely in her responses. I would definitely recommend her.
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3 days
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K karenlclancy
Repeat Client

United States
I booked Jess twice. The first go around she gave me such good notes on my novel that I implemented them on yet another edit. Once done I contracted her to read it again. It was a great experience for me to write with the knowledge she would be checking it for flow, clarity and storytelling. I can’t wait to write another book and to work with her again!
$200-$400
Price
6 weeks
Duration
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Seller's Response
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nicw2019
Repeat Client

United Kingdom
Working with Jessica has been, once again, a wonderful experience. I cannot imagine working with anyone else now when I have a manuscript that needs an in-depth review. I write psychological thriller and Jessica's knowledge and grasp of what is required to deliver the reader a propulsive read is beyond...
$100-$200
Price
9 days
Duration
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Helpful?K k_alexis_adams

United States
Jess was an absolute DREAM to work with. Her inline comments and edit suggestions were both thorough and thoughtful, and her reader’s report gave me a wealth of ideas for improving my manuscript, which is exactly what I was hoping for! The detailed notes she provided outlining my novel’s structure and...
$100-$200
Price
13 days
Duration
J 
Seller's Response
Helpful?P pemurphy0627

United States
Jess provided me with a helpful, very thorough review of my manuscript. The reader report was detailed and addressed all the questions I initially had. The inline comments are also greatly appreciated and useful. I feel like her comments were honest and encouraging at the same time. As I'm returning...
$100-$200
Price
13 days
Duration
J 
Seller's Response
Helpful?C csc555
Repeat Client

United States
Jessica did an outstanding job reviewing my query letter and synopsis. After her initial suggestions, I had some questions, and she provided a lot of helpful suggestions as I worked through more edits. She was knowledgeable, professional, and very timely in her responses. I would definitely recommend her.
Up to $50
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3 days
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