I will provide an editorial critique for your manuscript

A thorough editorial critique for your manuscript geared for traditional publishing.

On story, this will cover the macro elements (plot, character, setting), to the micro elements (pacing, tension, dialogue, emotion).

On editing, I will help identify instances on your writing that can be strengthened to better tell the story. These suggestions will be in line with Chicago Manual of Style, It was the best of sentences, it was the worst of sentences by June Casagrande, The Emotional Craft of Fiction by Donald Maass, and Strunk & White's Elements of Style to name a few references.

I also might recommend a craft book (or two) which I think would benefit you.